Traffic Stop -- Part 12

[ajjones2]

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[toejam]

you are a great writer loved this chapter

[wormee]

Awesome!

But I forget what kind of boots Paula was wearing. I thought they were cowboy boots.

[indian_slaveboy]

WHAT BOOTS??? I don't care abt what boots she was wearing.. Whatever it was, this is such a good story. Man.. ur one of the greatest writers on this board and this is one of the BEST STORIES. Even if u went wrong with the boots.. I think no one has any right to Crib. UR TOO GOOD. And I think most ppl on this forum wud agree..

THREE CHEERS FOR TRAFFIC STOP (MAY THIS SERIES NEVER STOP)

[AceViper64]

this series is becoming one of my favorites, great work!

[vallee6142]

Nice chapter

[dolphin20pl1]

Is there any chance Parts 1-6 could be reposted sometime as I missed them. This is an excellent story, can`t wait for part 13.

[chicagofeet]

This story is currently the #1 reason I tune in every single day!

I hope you publish this as a book someday!
Then a movie.
Then a video game.
Then .... you get the idea.

Thanks so much.

[andybis]

a masterpiece, simply a masterpiece!!! Congratulations!!! Andy

[stomp on me]

great chapter!!!!this who;e story is wonderful!!!keep up the great work....;)

[pepe3z]

Excellent !
Please can anybody re-post part 3???, I missed that one.
I think this is the best story ever !. And only cucciolopage.com could make a movie with it (but he´d need a couple of very little actors).

[ah2]

Storm clouds approaching. Get all the women into the tent!

[volupfan]

oh baby, nice job ajj! can I ask if they have made a floor out of some of these guys have they also taken a few of them and made for some nice seating arrangements while they enjoy their food? I can't imagine they would just stand around this special tent...

:p :D :p

[chicagofeet]

Ok, lets spoil the fun and get technical.

That floor must stink. How do the women prevent bodily functions, or do they just hose them down nightly, which would result in a moldy smell.

Maybe the netting is a smell and vapor barrier as well.

Hey, I'm an engineer. Sorry, never mind.
Marvelous story!

[ajjones2]

Thanks for the compliments! Makes all the difference!

I described Paula's boots as high-heeled cowgirl boots throughout the story...not sure where I'm inconsistent.

My assumption is the men are put on the floor the day of the concert, then removed afterward, so there's little worry about the smell for so short a time. I wasn't gonna get too technical, but, to make our engineers happy, I'll add a para or two in the next post or so.

I'll post the "Parts to date" Traffic Stop file to this, for those who haven't kept up and are interested.

I'll also post the entire file when it's finished, so you don't need to copy this if you just want a copy of the story later.

AJ

[chicagofeet]

Thanks but NO-NO. Don't change a thing about your writing style. We LOVE it.

But when you're done....
So what exactly was the formula used that made the men shrink and weaken. Did the women also take it, resulting in their getting bigger and stronger? How was it distributed to everyone in the community? By water, air etc.

If he ever gets back to his wife, does she have any legal recource in their new society against the cops, college girls, and women who beat up her "property" in the first place?

Do the other enslaved guys on the floor have owners back home? How did they come to get separated from them?

Charles Schultz, the creator of Peanuts, was famous for patiently listening to story ideas suggested by friends and family alike. He would then consistently ignore all of them and write whatever HE wanted.

I sincerely hope you continue to do the same.