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Moonboy
05-14-2007, 12:34 PM
I wrote this one and then got some editorial help from Strict Susan. It was not originally a facesitting story but I've easily adapted it to be one.

IRON LUNGS
By Moonboy

Bob was my best friend. He had been my best friend for as long as I could remember. When he met Laura, I knew very quickly that he would marry her and I was not proved wrong. Even so, even after they were married, our friendship continued although I was single and as time went on we had fewer and fewer interests in common.

“When are you going to find yourself a good woman?” Laura asked me jokingly on more than one occasion when I was at their house. “Every man needs a woman to keep him in order,” she assured me. “It would do you a world of good.”

“I guess I just haven’t found the right woman,” I told her, smiling with her although I had a feeling there was more than a little seriousness behind her words.

“I’ll have to introduce you to my friend Amanda,” she said. “I think she would be just right for you.”

Bob nodded wisely. “She’s not as adventurous as you though, is she Laura?” he asked her. “She wouldn’t have a basement like yours!”

Laura’s basement would have been legendary, except that as far as I was aware only she, Bob and I knew about it. I had not seen it, but she and Bob made no secret, in front of me at least, that she had some special “toys” down there and that she and Bob enjoyed the kinkier side of sex from time to time. Bob had helped her to set the room up, and he had told me many of the details. It really did sound rather exciting, and I was decidedly jealous.

“I’ll invite Amanda round here,” Laura told me, “And we can all go and play in the basement. I think you’d enjoy that, and I’m quite sure Amanda would. She’s rather like me in many ways and no, Bob, you’re wrong. She is just as adventurous as I am. You just wait and see.”

She caught my eyes as I stared at her, taking in the curves of her body. “Yes,” she said, “She has the same shaped body as me too, near enough anyway. So you can stop eyeing me up and think about her instead!”

Bob burst out laughing. He and I knew each other well enough for any rivalry to be completely good-natured. He knew that I would never touch his wife, any more than she, I was sure, would consider touching me. It was simply unthinkable.

One evening, Bob telephoned me. “You’re not going to believe the conversation I’ve just had,” he said. “Amanda’s here and she and Laura have spent the whole
evening so far talking about sex. Laura told me to call you and get you over here right now!”

“If you’re serious, I’m on my way,” I told him, almost dropping the telephone. “You are serious, aren’t you?”

Bob assured me he was completely serious. I was there in less than five minutes.

Amanda was there as Bob had told me. She was everything I had expected, and more. As Laura had said, Amanda did look very much like Laura, and both of them were very attractive, sexy and desirable women.
“Right,” said Laura. “Shall we?”

The question was directed to Amanda. “Definitely,” Amanda replied. “No doubt about it. He’s just what I need.”

“Shall we what?” I asked, feeling a little foolish. I was sure they were talking about sex, and yet it did not seem possible. Rather, it seemed too good to be true. Nothing was that simple!

“Down to the basement,” explained Laura. “Amanda and I both want a bit of kinky fun before... well, before we see what develops. Let’s just say that we’ll be interested to see what comes up.”

I glanced at Bob. He nodded, but did not say anything. The look in his eyes was enough.

There was a lot of equipment in that basement, but most noticeably there were two iron lung like containers positioned side by side in the center of the room. Each one had a number of straps, locks and contraptions attached to it. Each was also surrounded by computer consoles and other equipment. Laura invited me to strip naked and to lie down in one of them while my friend, without needing to be asked, removed his clothes and got into the other.

It took more than five minutes for all the straps to be adjusted, tightened and buckled securely. I was strapped in at the ankles, above and below the knees, just below the hips, at the hips, at mid-waist and just under the shoulders. My elbows were strapped down. My wrists were also both strapped down and cuffed with chains connected to the container. My head was outside the iron lung, resting on a pad on a small platform. Laura closed the iron lung, trapping my neck. It fit snugly to my chin. My head was completely immobilized. It made me feel a little claustrophobic, but at the same time it was incredibly exciting.

If I could have moved my head at this point, I would have glanced across at Bob. It was Laura who was securing me while Amanda was fixing Bob securely in place. That seemed wrong. Surely it should have been Amanda paying me the attention while Bob’s wife looked after him? I was suddenly embarrassed, realizing that to find myself so excited by something that Bob’s wife was doing to me was not what I had intended and not something that should be happening to me. At the same time, I realized that Bob was undoubtedly finding Amanda’s attentions equally exciting. I tried to relax.

There was no discomfort anywhere, but I could not move a muscle. Laura stepped back and looked me over, smiling. I could not believe how completely helpless I felt. I could see no way I could get out of this on my own. Laura made sure everything was secure. Satisfied that everything was as she wanted it, she told me to open my mouth and stuffed a huge ball-gag into it, strapped tightly around the back of my head and around the platform to hold it in place. She just stood back and looked me over for a minute, a smile of satisfaction on her face.

Laura stood beside me majestically, her long brown hair falling almost to her hips, her shapely figure before me. I could not move my head at all, fixed by the straps, and only my eyes could move to look up. Her breasts were above my eyes and as I looked at her I realized just how aroused I was becoming and, more worryingly, just how frightened I was. I suddenly had the sense that something was wrong, badly wrong, and in that moment and despite my arousal I desperately wanted to be free of the iron lung and straps that held me. As I tried to grasp what was happening, she took one step forward and leaned over me.

"My, my, look where your silly lust has gotten you," she whispered into my ear.

"Mmph! Mmph!" I mumbled into the gag.

Something about her attitude had changed now that I was secured and helpless.

"You thought this would be just a fun little evening of sex games, didn't you babe?" Laura purred.

"Oh, I'm sure they both did," Amanda said. "What a surprise for them both."

I could see Bob out of the corner of my eyes and there was no doubt that at that moment he was just as scared as I was. He, too, had just realized that things were not what he had thought they would be.

I moaned and struggled, but I could barely move. Laura picked up my clothes and threw them into a garbage bucket.

"You won't need those any more," she said.

I strained against the bonds but it was useless. I saw that Amanda was tossing Bob's clothes out too. She then set up some television equipment.

"You get to watch some videos," she smirked.

There were computer monitors directly above us, only a few inches from our eyes. We were both left there watching porno movies as Laura and Amanda walked out without a word. It was fairly mindless stuff, films of heaving, naked bodies grunting and thrusting into each other, then women showering with rivulets of soapy water running down their bodies. Much of it was no more than light porn but it went on and on as though it would never come to an end.

The one part of me that could still move was my cock, and it was most definitely standing at attention. It was hours before, finally, Laura and Amanda returned.

"Are you having fun boys?" Amanda teased.

Laura walked over and opened the iron container I was sealed into, very obviously checked my erection. She did the same to Bob. She said to Bob, "Congratulations, your training will now begin. You should have been more agreeable, but now you have no choice. You will be whatever I want you to be."

Amanda checked some of the equipment that was connected to us.

"Their heart rates are up,” she grinned. “They’re both very excited."

"It’s only the beginning," Laura said. “A good beginning, I think.”

She put a new DVD into the player. Bob was moaning angrily into his gag. Laura patted him on the head as he mumbled in anger.

I glared at Bob sidelong, blaming him for this. Surely he must have known what Laura had planned? How could he let me be dragged into this too? I was furious that what had promised to be no more than a little kinky sex had turned into these hours of frustration and it was Bob’s wife who was doing it.

We could only lie there and endure whatever they chose to do to us. Laura patted me on the head too.

"I guess you boys are completely incapable of turning the tables on us now."

Again I writhed and moaned, proving how helpless I really was and how I was completely at her mercy. It was suddenly obvious that the two of them were far from finished with us and that the hours of frustration we had already endured were merely a start to whatever it was they intended to do to us.

“Ready?” Laura asked Amanda. She nodded. With the containers open but both of us strapped down, both of them picked up razors and advanced towards us. We really writhed now, seeing that they intended to shave us, but there was no escaping.

Amanda leaned forward, her shoulder length blond hair hanging as her breasts seemed to swell in their cups. She bent, hands on knees to look at us intently. She stared at me thoughtfully, her bright eyes as blue as the sky.

"My, they sure are very bad tempered considering the situation they’re in," she said. “You would have thought they would be more careful to be nice to us. Do you think they really realize what we could do to them?”

"Maybe they'll be less temperamental after the next treatment," Laura suggested.

We both begged as well we could through our gags. It was to no avail. We were powerless to stop them and nothing we could have said would have made any difference to them. They started to shave us around our genitals.

They did not stop there. Once our genitals were smooth and hairless, they went on to shave our legs, our chests, our stomachs, our balls and in fact everything they could reach. Of course, the two women could do whatever they pleased with us. We had no way of stopping them, and now we both realized that their intentions were far from pleasant.

Laura patted my head as she might pat a pet. She ran her finger around my lips spread wide around the gag.

"Now we really start to get serious," she said.

This time it was different. I hardened as they stripped naked. Amanda walked over and smiled down at me.
“Take a good look at my face,” she smirked. “You’ll spend most of your time becoming much more familiar with my other end.”
Then she straddled me as I moaned helplessly. Her lovely ass was above my face and I whimpered as it descended, cutting off my sight as her thighs clamped around my head and she wiggled down, completely sealing me in. I could see nothing except glimpses of her ass and thighs and vagina as she grinded and rubbed for what seemed forever and was certainly hours. She let me get a breath only when I was almost unconscious. My brain was on fire with need for air as were my lungs. My sight was her ass. My hearing was only of her clamping thighs. My sense of smell and taste detected only the engulfing aroma of her sweet vaginal juices as she orgasmed again and again from riding my face and my sense of touch was all of her luscious ass. It must have been hours. I pissed all over because I could not hold it any longer. There seemed to be no end to it. I was seeing her luscious body in a way I never dreamed I would, closer to her ass and pussy than I ever thought possible, and all I wanted was to get away. It felt to me as though I had been here forever.

The helplessness was unbearable. The need to breathe was a burning agony. The powerlessness was absolute, yet the lust was overpowering. I was going insane. I was sure I was going insane and that at any minute my conscious mind would simply shut itself off and replace all rational thought with a gibbering madness in which reality became fantasy, and even in the fantasy itself it became impossible to distinguish pleasure from nightmare.

I was on the edge, the very edge, when she suddenly stood up and got off of me as if she had predicted the exact moment it would become too much for me.

"So, was it good for you?" Amanda smirked.

I could not nod my head but the truth was that it was terrifying but horribly arousing.

"Now for even more fun," said Amanda gleefully.

To Be Continued...

vallee6142
05-14-2007, 2:52 PM
Nice story

mt123
05-14-2007, 6:01 PM
great job!!

crudwell
05-14-2007, 8:50 PM
the story would be a lot better if you use erotic words like arse, vagina, buttocks etc instead of their slang equivelents

Moonboy
05-15-2007, 2:45 AM
the story would be a lot better if you use erotic words like arse, vagina, buttocks etc instead of their slang equivelents

No it would just play more to your particular fetishes. But thanks for your typically negative opinion. The word 'arse' is a slang term and one that, for some reason, totally turns me off. I occasionally use the words vagina and buttocks to change things up but, by and large, those words are not raw and erotic.

crudwell
05-15-2007, 4:07 AM
No it would just play more to your particular fetishes. But thanks for your typically negative opinion. The word 'arse' is a slang term and one that, for some reason, totally turns me off. I occasionally use the words vagina and buttocks to change things up but, by and large, those words are not raw and erotic.

not being negative or dissin you but just stating a point that words like ass, cunny, etc are really pure turn offs to the general mass...

ever read Victorian erotica ??? Ever read some stories where elegant words make even a sentence "erotic" ?

Moonboy
05-15-2007, 6:14 AM
not being negative or dissin you but just stating a point that words like ass, cunny, etc are really pure turn offs to the general mass...

ever read Victorian erotica ??? Ever read some stories where elegant words make even a sentence "erotic" ?

If I wasn't doing first person narration, it might be different. Third person narration should be objective and not sound as if it is coming from a character in the story. First person narration should sound as if it matches the speech patterns and choices of words the character in the story would use, in this case words that are in common usage rather than the clinical terms.

Also, and this has been something I've wondered about for a while, is 'arse' a common term in some countries? Here in the United States the word simply is not used. Whenever I read the word, I assume the writer is from another nation because it jumps out at me that much (so to speak). Isn't 'arse' the exact equivalent of 'ass'?

Also, nobody uses the word 'cunny' here. Vagina, pussy, cunt, but not cunny.

"ever read Victorian erotica ??? Ever read some stories where elegant words make even a sentence "erotic" ?"

I want to respond to that. But I'm already making the grandest mistake anyone who actually writes can make- I'm responding to a critic.

Strict Susan
05-15-2007, 7:03 AM
No, you should respond to critics - certainly in a forum like this where most criticism is constructive and useful.

Personally I try and avoid either slang OR clinical words in stories wherever possible. Of course, it depends on the writing style and the context, but, for example, isn't it so much nicer and no less erotic to say "she lowered herself onto his face until he was completely unable to breathe in the smothering wet flesh between her legs" rather than "she lowered her dripping cunt onto his face and smothered him with it".
Or something like that!

Having said that, your own creative writing style is important - but it's important to be consistent and look at the words you use in the context of the characters and the situation. The words themselves and the way they are put together can create a scene and atmosphere, bringing the story to life in the reader's mind quite as much as what you actually say in the story.

In my examples above, the second one may be totally appropriate if, for example, the action was being done in a grubby little backroom by some scruffy street-slut (I have nothing against scruffy street sluts - you know what I mean!). If, however, the action was being performed by a more mature lady with style and elegance, then the first example would probably be better.

Moonboy
05-15-2007, 10:24 AM
No, you should respond to critics - certainly in a forum like this where most criticism is constructive and useful.

Personally I try and avoid either slang OR clinical words in stories wherever possible. Of course, it depends on the writing style and the context, but, for example, isn't it so much nicer and no less erotic to say "she lowered herself onto his face until he was completely unable to breathe in the smothering wet flesh between her legs" rather than "she lowered her dripping cunt onto his face and smothered him with it".
Or something like that!

Having said that, your own creative writing style is important - but it's important to be consistent and look at the words you use in the context of the characters and the situation. The words themselves and the way they are put together can create a scene and atmosphere, bringing the story to life in the reader's mind quite as much as what you actually say in the story.

In my examples above, the second one may be totally appropriate if, for example, the action was being done in a grubby little backroom by some scruffy street-slut (I have nothing against scruffy street sluts - you know what I mean!). If, however, the action was being performed by a more mature lady with style and elegance, then the first example would probably be better.

I read back over this chapter of the story. It is arguable that anytime one reads over his own story, there will be a word here or there that could be changed but, in this case, I stand by the story as written. In fact, I used words such as vagina, vaginal, and similar words interchangeably with other words, specifically to insure that I was not repeating the same words over any more than possible. I simply was not using the same words that a particular reader finds erotic over and over. Again, I was also writing in the first person as a character in the story.

However, I don't agree that one should respond to a critic whose entire posts are often nothing more than, "I didn't like this story." I suppose a fair response would be that you got what you paid for and let's see your contributions. But rather than it turning into something like that, it would have been better just to let it go.

mcmerlin
05-15-2007, 1:06 PM
Does one critic point really bother you that much?
Ok I have a sensitive side too...eh sometimes.
But when crudwell makes this an issue it gets more coverage than it deserves from you (imho).
I dont care if you write vagina, pussy or whatever, the plot is interesting.
Why these Iron lungs,will they serve only as device for bondage?
And please dont cut their dicks (cock,penis) too soon :)

However,please keep on writing this marvelous story dear Moonboy

btw. this drawing from St.Syl seemed fitting to your story !
http://img79.imageshack.us/img79/3559/fs144bb6.th.jpg (http://img79.imageshack.us/my.php?image=fs144bb6.jpg)

aduanhab
05-15-2007, 7:02 PM
yes keep this baby going :)

Moonboy
05-15-2007, 7:07 PM
Nice artwork and don't worry, I was going to stay away from the dick cutting this time. :)

iamjurell
05-15-2007, 7:12 PM
yeah cos that actually depressed me, thinking of the sheer futility of his situation, as sexy as it was....... (that seat of revenge story)
it just kinda disturbed me that he wasnt gonna be able to comunicate

but this story is great!
heh layed it on kinda think didnt i

Heckron
05-15-2007, 8:55 PM
not being negative or dissin you but just stating a point that words like ass, cunny, etc are really pure turn offs to the general mass...

ever read Victorian erotica ??? Ever read some stories where elegant words make even a sentence "erotic" ?

I personally enjoy the terminology Moonboy is using.

Perhaps I missed it...many many many times :rolleyes:...but I don't think I've ever seen anyone other than yourself complain about a writer's personal style, so I can't imagine where you're drawing the conclusion that the general masses dislike this from. :)

Keep it up Moonboy! I think you wrote it very well. :D

Moonboy
05-16-2007, 4:02 AM
yeah cos that actually depressed me, thinking of the sheer futility of his situation, as sexy as it was....... (that seat of revenge story)
it just kinda disturbed me that he wasnt gonna be able to comunicate

but this story is great!
heh layed it on kinda think didnt i

Yes I think there is a fine line. There is something I find hot about the guy being in a situation where he cannot talk so he can't even protest. But there is also something hot about him being able to talk but protesting won't make any difference. That's what I'm going to get into more in this one.

door_step
05-16-2007, 5:24 AM
Yes I think there is a fine line. There is something I find hot about the guy being in a situation where he cannot talk so he can't even protest. But there is also something hot about him being able to talk but protesting won't make any difference. That's what I'm going to get into more in this one.

Great idea Moonboy:thumbsup2: :thumbsup2:
I like your stories a lot; and please do use the sort of words you prefer yourself :worship:
doorstep

Logan
05-16-2007, 7:40 AM
I love the story and would like it to continue.

sealbert
05-16-2007, 11:28 AM
great story sofar, Moonboy.
can't wait to see what will happen next.

Your style of writing works for me, so please continue.

Robert

snow_presto
05-16-2007, 1:16 PM
Great story moonboy. Nice to see Strict Susan doing the editing for this one. Can't wait to read the next chapter.

mulderboy
05-16-2007, 5:27 PM
Great story! The only suggestion/constructive criticism I have is that you explain the smothering part longer. It seems that it took a long time for you to build the suspense, but when it came to the smothering, it seemed to go by very fast ("it must have been hours"--what happened during those hours?). Thanks though, I like where this is heading.

Ste Letto
05-21-2007, 7:52 AM
Hi Moonboy,

Everyone is entitled to an opinion, but the thing I disliked about Crudwell's comments was that he stated his opinions as facts rather than opinions.

I like your writing style.

As a fellow writer, I know that for me the plot and action go in tune with my tastes and also go a bit where they want to go, as if the action has a mind of its own. For me its about letting go and riding a wave not reining in the horse. Just some thoughts.

crudwell
05-22-2007, 2:57 AM
No, you should respond to critics - certainly in a forum like this where most criticism is constructive and useful.

Personally I try and avoid either slang OR clinical words in stories wherever possible. Of course, it depends on the writing style and the context, but, for example, isn't it so much nicer and no less erotic to say "she lowered herself onto his face until he was completely unable to breathe in the smothering wet flesh between her legs" rather than "she lowered her dripping cunt onto his face and smothered him with it".
Or something like that!

Having said that, your own creative writing style is important - but it's important to be consistent and look at the words you use in the context of the characters and the situation. The words themselves and the way they are put together can create a scene and atmosphere, bringing the story to life in the reader's mind quite as much as what you actually say in the story.

In my examples above, the second one may be totally appropriate if, for example, the action was being done in a grubby little backroom by some scruffy street-slut (I have nothing against scruffy street sluts - you know what I mean!). If, however, the action was being performed by a more mature lady with style and elegance, then the first example would probably be better.


Thats brilliantly explained Susan Strict !!! :rasta: